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《剑啸残阳》评
书昨天在外就看过了,古龙的江湖里没写过武当派和张三丰,倒是金庸把张三丰写的太出彩,名气太大,你在这里引用为了显示主角强大有讨巧的意思,也很聪明。但我一看就觉得怪怪的,整个第一章利用战斗描绘主角狠辣、机智,人物立体。但张三丰就出来被人打,那么门外除了那几个弟子没别人吗?就算没有马上也可以叫吧。你一个杀手跑武当派撒野不被群殴?战斗描绘手法也有点单一了,显示主角强大抵挡两大弟子攻击并不立体,相反如果战斗时候张三丰说一句主角你真棒,我觉得以他的江湖地位,俺应该是能记住他的。。从第一到后文的过渡有些强制,有些突兀。就如,如果我不看了征文大纲,我根本就不知道黑衣人是谁,就等于第二章又跑去写了个熊哥哥,拜托,第一章的黑衣人不是主角么,存在感呢?后文没继续看了,到第二章就感觉花了大力气挖了个坑,可是没填起来的感觉。。
总体来说书不错,在征文的作品中也属上乘,就是部分逻辑有较大漏洞。
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